Honestly a nice story, listened to it on the drive to Mass. I would say some portions could be whittled down a bit, especially near the end from the General’s POV. Kinda drags out the twist a bit. Overall still a good story!
I was initially not going to drop so much exposition, but I didn't want this to be an end of the world sort of thing so I came up with a reason to justify the lone bomber.
You almost brought me to tears. Beautiful! Bravo!
Excellent twist, good stuff.
My only criticism that holds any water would be the odd bits like “heart by the heartstrings.” Very enjoyable read.
Yeah I went back through and cut/fixed some of that. I wrote it all at once and didn't reread it so I've had to fix stuff.
I had just finished working out when I suddenly decided to write dis so I was sweaty and tryna get in the shower ASAP.
Honestly a nice story, listened to it on the drive to Mass. I would say some portions could be whittled down a bit, especially near the end from the General’s POV. Kinda drags out the twist a bit. Overall still a good story!
I was initially not going to drop so much exposition, but I didn't want this to be an end of the world sort of thing so I came up with a reason to justify the lone bomber.